Intro Draft

My Parents Divorce

It was a winter night sometime in December, and my brothers and I were upstairs. My brothers and I were little elementary school kids, anxiously waiting for Christmas to come, and hoping school would never start again. Then we heard our parents holler for us to come downstairs. My twin brother, Nick, younger brother, Alex, and I took off. Everything was a race between my brothers and me, weather it was finishing dinner, doing our homework, or just going down the staircase, we were battling. I went down the first five carpet steps, took a hard right turn, down the next twenty or so steps, took the last right turn, and leaped for the ground, skipping the last few steps. I had won the race, like normal, and turned to point and laugh at my brothers still flying down the stairs. But when I turned around and saw my mom and dad at opposite ends of the fireplace telling us to sit between them, I knew something was wrong. My mom looked sad, and my dad, with his Christmas-like red button down long-sleeved shirt, hugged Alex. The fire burned behind our backs, and I was nervous and scared to find out what was going on. My mom then turned to us and told us that she was going to divorce my father. When I heard these words, I could not look up any longer. I fixed my eyes on my chocolate lab, Coco, and realized what just happened. My mom went on to tell us that she was going to take my brothers and I with her to live in her hometown, Tampa, Florida, but assured us “everything was going to be alright.” My life just took a dive, and I knew everything was not going to be alright. I was leaving my dad, my friends, everything, and it was extremely tough. Soon thereafter, my brothers and I were excused from the “family meeting” and we went back upstairs. This time, however, there was no racing. Once upstairs, Alex and I met Nick in his room where we gathered on his big green bed and cried together.


I was hoping to accomplish attractiveness with this introduction. I hope the reader will find the writing catchy, and make him or her want to keep reading. I also included lots of detail so the reader could get a feel for the setting, characters, and I hope it will make them feel like they are a part of the action.