Commentary Outline

I. Introduction

1. Explain the trend that I have noticed here at UCF (Personal Transportation Problem).
2. Tell how long it has been a problem.
3. Bring in some of my interview questions to see what other students at UCF think about the bike, skateboard, and scooter problem.
4. Thesis Statement:

a. The University of Central Florida needs to fix the skateboarding, long boarding, biking, scootering, and other riding problems on campus because it will increase the safety, lower the stress of people, and even help the laziness problem with students in college.

II. Body Paragraph (Injuries)

1. Explain the accidents I have witnessed and encoutered myself.
2. Explain the accidents the person I interviewed has encountered or seen.
3. Find out if UCF has had any reported large injuries, like if the paramedics were involved.

III. Body Paragraph (Skaters or bikers viewpoints)

1. Bring in an interview of a skateboarder (my roomate)
2. Find out why people ride on campus instead of walk.

IV. Body Paragraph (Possible solutions/my opinion)

1. UCF may need to ban the use of skateboards, bikes, and scooters on campus.
2. Explain that I think people ride because of pure laziness.
3. Include imagery of what the capus would be like without people riding through it.

V. Conclusion

1. Reintroduce thesis.
2. Final opinion about the trend or issue.